Freshman Year Final Paper
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Brian and Laura, those are insightful, well-detailed comments...
05/08/12, 01:45 pm
This was an amazingly written essay and very easy to read and follow along. I have absolutely no criticisms that I could find at least. I really like how you defined the difference between "fans" and "fanatics," as I always thought they were the same thing. Also I like how you emphasized the importance of fans for not only the moral support but also for financial support. Your comparison of the government to the teams and citizens to fans is spot on and makes that easy to understand even for someone who might not know anything about sports.
Your use of Bowling sources was perfect as well. In Homo Ludens you emphasized that sports don't necessarily need fans to exist in their basic roots. Without fans the game itself would still exist. You took it further into that in beginning these games we pay big bucks for were at one time universally just played for fun which makes you think about how seriously some people take these things.
Also I enjoyed how you took us back to the beginning of both baseball in America and soccer in Africa and how they both were created for fun, and were just played by neighborhood kids.
The part about television I think was very important to mention as well because it really did make sports that much more popular and openly available to more people. As we discussed in Professor Bowling's Sports History class, without the invention of the radio and television sports would not be nearly as popular as they are today and you depicted that perfectly.
05/04/12, 07:36 am
Your essay was extremely well written and interesting. I found it interesting because fans really do have a big effect on sports and the business side of sports. I really like how you distinguished the difference between a fan and a fanatic right away. Your essay is not repetitive at all which is really hard to do when writing about the same topic for 16 pages. You did a really good job keeping it interesting throughout the paper because of your word choice. Your usage of Homo Ludens was really good as well. It fit perfectly because I also think Huizinga would agree with what you stated as well. I do not think he would approve of business because it takes away from the sacredness of the sport.
Your incorporation of Bowling's sources were very good not only because of the amount but, because of the great aid they provided. Your barnstorming example was very important because they aided the start of the business. Overall your essay was really good and I think you did a great job using the sources from seminar too!
05/02/12, 06:17 pm
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